| EBON NIGHTS | ||
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| Meet Ebony | ||
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The Joy of being alive | |
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Panel 1 - Ebony flies off. She appears to still be a bit upset.
Panel 2 - We see Ebony flying through a bad area of town. There�s Graphitti on the walls, bars on the windows, etc. Think your typical downtown area in a bad neighborhood. She�s flying fairly low, not trying to avoid attention. She�s flying about 30 feet off the ground. The few pedistrians on the street are looking up at her. This is important. Near her is a bar with a sign that says �Machalian�s Bar�(you're welcome to insert another name if you desire). The bar has a large window facing the street.
Ebony - I wasn�t paying attention to where I was going�wonder where I am.
Panel 3 - We see someone fly through the window. In the background is a large man facing the window. He appears to be the person who threw the man through it. He doesn�t appear to see Ebony.
Ebony (thinks) - Hello!!
Page 2 - 5 panel page. The first is a panel that takes up about a quarter of the page. The others are vertical rectangular panels.
Panel 1 - We see Ebony walk through the door of the bar. Inside the bar is filled with smoke. We see the large man from the window now sitting at a stool by the bar. There are circular tables around the bar with stool at each one. There are a few people at the tables and no one is sitting near the bar except the big guy. The big guy is looking at Ebony who just walked in.
Eddie (aka the big guy) - Hello babe. Can I get ya a drink?
Ebony (thinks) - What a loser.
Ebony - Sure. That�d be nice.
Panel 2 - Ebony is now sitting on a stool beside Eddie. Eddie is looking her up and down. Ebony is looking at the bartender with an almost childish grin,not that Eddie is looking at her face to notice.
Eddie - Don�t just stand there loser! Get her a drink!
Bartender - What�ll ya have miss?
Ebony - Can I have a Taquila Sunrise?
Panel 3 - The bartender seems a little nervous. Ebony is shocked and a little shaken. Eddie is just a bit angry.
Bartender - Sure. Can I see some id?
Ebony - Oh�um�I seem to have forgot it.
Eddie - That�s okay doll! She�s with me�get her the damn drink!
Panel 4 - We get a close-up of Eddie and Ebony. The bartender has left to get her a drink.
Eddie - So gorgeous, where ya been all my life?
Ebony (thinks) - Avoiding you.
Ebony - Do you know anything beside clich�s?
Panel 5 - Eddie looks a bit upset. He also seems a little drunk.
Eddie - I�m taking a wiss. Ya better get that mouth under control!
Page 3 - 6 panel page.
Panel 1 - We see Ebony sitting rather unconcerned as Eddie tries to walk to the bathroom. We can now see Eddie�s obviously drunk as he weaves his way to the bathroom. The Bartender is handing Ebony her drink.
Bartender - Look miss. He�s a mean one. Why not leave before he gets back?
Panel 2 - Ebony glances over at the broken window. The bartender averts his eyes toward the floor.
Ebony - What happened?
Bartender - A man sat in Eddie�s seat. I lose more business because of him.
Panel 3 - We�re still focused on Ebony and the Bartender.
Ebony - Why not kick him out?
Bartender - Tried that once. He went on a rampage, I lost a lot of inventory. Beside, he's the owners son.
Panel 4 - Close-up on Ebony. She kinda half smiles as she sips her drink.
Ebony - This is really good, thanks.
Panel 5 - We see Eddie return and sit in his stool. Ebony is still sitting on the stool sipping her drink. The Bartender appears a bit concerned but remains quiet.
Eddie - Did ya miss me?
Ebony - With everything I�ve thrown thus far.
Panel 6 - Eddie appears a bit confused. He�s kinda laughing but trying to figure out of she�s serious or not. Ebony is rolling her eyes.
Eddie - Heh�nice one.
Ebony - I�m surprised an idiot like you got that one.
Page 4 - We show Eddie is looking at Ebony, trying to figure out what just happened. It�s obvious he�s not used to being insulted. He�s getting more frustrated with each panel, till he hits breaking point.
Panel 1 � Eddie looks like he�s getting mad, but trying to control his anger. Ebony looks completely unconcerned.
Eddie: Look, you better just be nice to me or�
Ebony: Or what?
Panel 2: Eddie is a little uncertain what do do now. He�s taken back by the fact Ebony won�t back down from him.
Eddie: Or I�ll do something�
Ebony: You�ll do something. Hmm�sounds absolutely terrifying.
Panel 3 � Eddie is starting to turn a little red. He�s getting absolutely irate. Ebony is staring at her nails now, completely ignoring Eddie, which in turn is making him angrier.
Eddie: I don�t know who you think you are to treat me like this but�
Ebony: To treat you like what Eddie? Like you treat everyone else?
Panel 4 � Eddie is shocked. He�s looking around the bar now, as if just now realizing there are other people here. Ebony is getting off the barstool and preparing to leave.
Ebony � Now you know how it feels.
Page 5 - 6 panel page. Each panel being evenly divinded. 3 on top and 3 on bottom.
Panel 1 - Eddie realizes he can�t lose face like this, so he throws a punch, which is caught by Ebony. Her hand is wrapped around his.
Panel 2 - As ebony squeezes the hand we can hear bones breaking. Eddie appears to be in great pain as he falls to his knees. Ebony continues to hold the hand.
Panel 3 - Ebony grabs Eddie�s collar and lifts him off the ground with one hand. In her other hand she�s holding her drink. She has a look like, I can�t believe you said that.
Ebony - Now Eddie, didn�t your mother teach you it�s not nice to hit women?
Eddie - Yeah�sure�sorry�I�m drunk.
Ebony: Obviously, that must be it.
Eddie � Please don�t hurt me.
Panel 4 - Ebony throws Eddie toward the door. Eddie lands on his side scared as hell and scrambling toward the door. Ebony has an amused smile on her face.
Ebony � Now get out of here and don�t come back.
Eddie - No problem!
Panel 5 - Ebony turns toward the bartender. She appears to be a bit weakened by the whole experience.
Ebony - Thanks for the drink.
Bartender � Lady, it�s on the house.
Bartender (thinks) - What the heck did I put in that anyway?
Page 6 - 5 panel page. The first is a horizontal panel. The others ore vertical filling the rest of the page.
Panel 1 - Ebony is flying away from the bar. She appears to be unsteady.
Ebony - Damn! Not now!
Panel 2 - Ebony crashes into some garbage cans, leaving large dents in them as she goes.
Panel 3 - Ebony walks rather unsteadily, almost drunkenly down the street.
Panel 4 - Ebony takes to the air again, still looking visibly shaken.
Ebony (thinks) - Come on, just a little further�
Panel 5 - Ebony smashes through the window of someone�s house. We can see she�s now in a fairly nice area of town in the suburbs. It�s now early morning, like around 2:00 am. The room she falls into is a bedroom done in white and blue. It�s obviously a man�s room, but very neat.
Ebony (thinks) - Made it�thank god!
Page 7 - Dark shadowy shot. We can�t make out any details. The shot is showing us the reflection from the mirror on the closet door as we see the change from Ebony to Mark.
Mark: Dear God, what am I going to do?
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